读后续写，作为高考新题型，非常考验学生的阅读理解能力、综合概括能力、逻辑分析能力以及想象力。想要写好并不容易，下面以 the Sea's Surprise 一题为范文，分解步骤，详细分析。

 

 

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【题 目】

 

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

 

 

 

The Sea’s Surprise

 

 

Jim and Andy walked along the beach, looking for an adventure. They joked that some day they would find a talking fish or a mermaid or a bottle with a treasure map inside. So far they had only found shells and rocks and seaweed. Today though was different. The boys felt excited.

 

Sea crabs scampered on the rocks. Up one side and down the other. They were quick and lively. The tide didn’t seem to ever wash them away. Then Jim saw a fish. It was stranded on the beach, just flopping around.

 

“Can it talk?” Andy asked.

 

“It looks like any other fish,” Jim said. He picked it up gently and carried it to the water.

 

“Do you think it will grant us any wishes?” Andy laughed.

 

The boys watched as the silver fish sped off through the water. “No. Maybe next time.” Jim grinned.

 

As the two friends walked farther down the beach they came upon a bottle. It was green with a cork in the mouth.

 

“Our luck will change. Does it have a map inside or a genie?” joked Andy.

 

Andy reached down and picked up the bottle. He rubbed it. Nothing happened. He pulled on the cork. Nothing happened. He shook it. Nothing happened.

 

“ Try the cork again. I bet the genie is waiting for us to release him. Or we’ll find a treasure map and have a real adventure,” Jim exclaimed.

 

Andy tugged again on the cork. He wiggled it back and forth. He twisted it around and around. Finally it popped out without breaking. Andy shook the bottle. Nothing came out. Looking inside he couldn’t see anything. Jim looked too and shook his head. Empty.

 

“It’s just an old wine bottle,” Jim complained. He grabbed the bottle and tossed it back onto the sand.

 

 

 

 

  注意：

 

1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

 

2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

 

3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

 

4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

 

Para.1: The bottle hit a rock and shattered into many pieces...

 

Para.2: Two boys ran after it...

 

续写详细步骤

 

1

 

第一次阅读获取基本信息

 

1.归纳基本信息 

 

2.理清故事情节

 

Jim和Andy想在海边寻宝→挽救了一条搁浅的鱼→碰到了一个瓶子→？？？

 

Beginning: Jim and Andy walked along the beach, looking for treasure.

→Jim saw a stranded fish on the beach.

→Jim picked the fish gently and carried it into the water.

→They walked farther down the beach and came upon a bottle.

→Andy reached down and picked up the bottle.

→He rubbed the bottle, pulled on the cork and shook the bottle.Nothing happened.

→Jim grabbed the bottle and tossed it back onto the sand.

→The bottle hit a rock and shattered into many pieces.

→Climax:?

→Two boys ran after it.

→Ending:?

 

2

第二次阅读获取情节发展线索

 

1.梳理续写逻辑：细读两段续写的开头语，理顺续写段落间的逻辑关系

 

Para.1: The bottle hit a rock and shattered into many pieces.

 

What was in the broken bottle?

What did Jim and Andy do?

What happened to the broken bottle?

 

Para.2：Two boys ran after it.

 

Why did the boys run after it?

What did they find later?

Where was the stranded fish saved by Jim?

 

2.归纳总结关键词：围绕划定的10个关键词，合理创新故事情节

 

felt excited, stranded—感受与状态

 

silver—颜色

 

treasure, bottle—重要事物

 

picked up, waiting for, shook the bottle, complained—动作

 

back and forth—方式

 

将关键词归类后，可以判断事物中的bottle在续写时必须使用，其他词可选择性使用。

 

3

预测情节发展

 

Paragraph 1：根据画线词picked up, silver, bottle可构思本段细节：瓶子碎了，Andy和Jim看见一把银(silver)钥匙掉在地上，Andy弯腰想拾起(pick up)钥匙。突然瓶子(bottle)又完好如初，钥匙又回到里面了。

 

Paragraph 2：根据画线词felt excited, treasure和stranded可构思本段细节：两个孩子跟着瓶子跑。他们进入海里时没有下沉而是漂浮在海上。他们感到很兴奋(felt excited)。瓶子把他们带到一个岛屿附近，那儿有很多财宝——是那条搁浅(stranded)的鱼来报恩的。

 

4

罗列提纲要点

 

Paragraph 1：

 

hit a rock and shattered into many pieces; 

saw a long, silver key; 

bent over to pick up the key;

came together to form a bottle; 

began rolling slowly toward the sea;

 

Paragraph 2：

 

ran after;

entered the sea;

floated on the surface;

followed the bottle; 

took as much as possible;

 

5

检查誊写

 

Paragraph 1：

 

The bottle hit a rock and shattered into many pieces. Both Andy and Jim gasped as they saw a long, silver key on the ground in the glass pieces. Then they looked at each other. Why didn’t it make any noise when they shook the bottle? Why didn’t they see it? Andy bent over to pick up the key. Suddenly the glass pieces came together to form a bottle again. The key was mysteriously back inside! And the bottle began rolling slowly toward the sea.

 

Paragraph 2：

 

Two boys ran after it. When they entered the sea, astonishingly they didn’t sink into the water but floated on the surface of it. They felt excited. They followed the bottle and then it stopped near an island where there was lots of treasure like diamonds and stones. “You can take as much as possible,” a voice came from the coast where a talking fish was swimming. It was the stranded fish that Jim saved and put back into the water.

 

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